By: Rhymemaster
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Country: U.S.A
"Stopping By Woods on a Winter's Evening"
with apologies to Robert Frost
for Denis and Sally and adolescent love, 1968 LONELY REFLECTIONS BY YOUR BEDROOM DOOR
I pause outside your bedroom door
And think of goodly times before.
I raise my arm and clench my fist:
We bit the apple to the core.
Those sultry nights we hugged and kissed,
While younger siblings booed and hissed,
Now seem remote, and far away.
It's tragic all the things we missed.
Love at first sight, the pundits say,
Is lust, disguised another way:
The spark of passion's candle wick
That binds us through each lovers' fray.
Your hair is lovely, dark and thick,
But someone else became your pick:
Our karmas simply didn't click...
Our karmas simply didn't click.
Published: OATMEAL & POETRY
STAND ALONE, August, 1997
Copyright © RhymeMaster 2000
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Comments: Great poetry showing discipline and emotion at the same time. I feel it is a privilege to have the right to read it. Merci Monsieur RhymeMaster.
Name: WEBwolf (Regis)
EMail: rauffray@chill.org
Comments: fabalous rm, fabalous-
loved it!
Name: val magnuson
EMail: valmag@hotmail.com
Comments: Well done.
Name: Ed Allen
EMail: eallen553@aol.com
Comments: For those who don't know, this is a literary parody.
Name: RhymeMaster
EMail: rhymer01@thewritersnook.com
Comments: Superb, and one of my favorites of yours.
Name: phattkat
Comments: Loved the rhyme scheme RM...nice work as usual.
Name: Ed Allen
EMail: eallen553@aol.com
Comments: Dear Jim,
The best yet...I loved every couplet...I drank every last drop...hic. - (drunk with envy, fantastic poem)
Name: Doug Poole
EMail: Doug@visual.co.nz
Comments: And yet, we still see her image in the room.
Great..
Name: The Quill
EMail: the Quill@thepoetsporch.com
Comments: Actually, the poem was written for Denis and Sally after he and Sally were divorced, so it is supposed to be from his point of view.
People who read it don't always seem to get that part, so maybe it isn't clear enough in the wording. ????
Name: RhymeMaster
EMail: rhymer01@thewritersnook.com
Comments: Dark and deep indeed. Thanks for sharing this art.
Does life imitate that which we choose to imitate?
Name: James Magyary
Comments: I am so pleased that so many fellow poets have had an opportunity to read your poetry.
Your work is of the finest literary quality, and a joy to read. A brilliant versifier. I am so glad that you live in my town.
It gives me an additional opportunity to enjoy your poetry in conversation as well as in writing, and reading.
This poem is a swooner.
You prove that poets can still write without negating rhyme, meter and rhythm. Although we are writing in an era of free verse.
A splendiferous poem.
Name: ZZ
EMail: veemer@aol.com
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