Comments: hmm- watch out where you step when the geese are around-
heavy duty- man- heavy duty
Name: val magnuson
EMail: valmag@prodigy.net
Comments: Please send me a pound of whatever it is you have been smoking!
Name: phattkat
Comments: Now this is poetry:
A rose gun
by any other
name
still shoots
thorns.
True North was never true to you ... intriguing notion too.
Nice job.
Name: RhymeMaster
EMail: rhymer01@thewritersnook.com
Comments: Seig Heil!! Very forceful Larry...gives me chills.
Name: Ed Allen
EMail: eallen553@aol.com
Comments: I liked it but.. I want two pounds of what you are smoking please :)
Name: Lynda Brezigar
EMail: valkyrie@optushome.com.au
Comments: Its disgusting, I think you hate women, I'm surprised at the comment by Lynda as well, how can you smile at something
like this hatred of women?
Name: Amy Leigh
EMail: charro@cfet.net.au
Comments: Ryhmemaster, you are so right. Once agian Larry Jaffe excels and pushes the boundarys of language.
Imagery so stark in reality you can taste it and a punch line like a David Tua uppercut...larry pulls no punches.
This is the work of a leading contempory poet.
Name: doug poole
EMail: doug@visual.co.nz
Comments: Keep an open mind Amy, not all women are paragons of virtue.
A poet should be allowed to express him/herself. I actually thought it was quite good although a little harsh. But hey! thats life :)
Name: Lynda Brezigar
EMail: valkyrie@optushome.com.au
Comments: hi.. thank you all for kind comments or criticism... am a little surprised about the comment re: women.
probably the poem would have worked just as well if i said rude men and women.. in hindsight that is really more what i meant..
but for some reason i had this vision of a woman wearing a hat with veil like in the 40's. that was what was in my mind.. anyway.. thanks for the input.. it is appreciated
Name: larry
EMail: larry@lgjaffe.com
Comments: Right on Larry.. I thought of the same type of woman smoking one of those long cigarettes.
No matter what sex you write about somebody will feel compelled to defend. And not all of us can write about plants or vegetables.
Your poem sparked a reaction and thats what we all want. Keep up the good work!
Name: Lynda Brezigar
EMail: valkyrie@optushome.com.au
Comments: You do clobber us over the head with the language of the poet.
Your poems are powerful and compelling. A bit caustic ,however, when you choose to tell and not show with the language.
Just an opinion. I agree with Doug Poole. You are a fine leading contemporary poet.
Name: ZZ
EMail: veemer@aol.com
Comments: Very acute observation, Ed. This is quite an intriguing poem.
Name: RhymeMaster
EMail: rhymer01@thewritersnook.com
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